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Persona 5 but awesome (AU)
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Hmmm Persona 5. What minor adjustments or changes would you give to the story and writing to make them good? First of all I would just outright remove Makoto from the story. Her arc could be replaced with the Phantom Thieves battling against Gaben where they recruit Hifumi Togo as a party member and not Makoto due to her diligant aid in strategically figuring out the location of Gaben's hideout using the power of jap chess. The next part is spoilers. Secondly, I would remove all hints that Akechi is the traitor. In fact, I would remove any malevolent action on his part prior to his betrayel. I would simply make him a guy who openly disagrees with the Phantom Thieves and displays hints of an aggressive ego born from his desire to be acknowledged by and subsequently get revenge on his father. This way he's a normal guy like everyone else who you see throughout the story but don't get as a Party Member until Okumura(Who I would still have die anyway by Shido's hand and Haru (Who only learns about the metaverse after he dies now and is also no longer a party member) blames the PTs for his death and becomes a recurring enemy in the last few palaces before accepting the PTs' innocence)'s palace. So you go through Sae's palace as normal once she begins to suspect you and it doesn't have any unnecessary convolutioned plot points. So then instead of pretending to be dead you got Shido going after the protag and directly challenging him, boasting that he is confident that he cannot be beaten. So you go through Shido's palace as normal with Akechi until right before reaching the treasure Akechi has an outburst about how he is hesitant about simply letting Shido atone for his sins and reveals to the group that he was Shido's son. Jokeman then gets the ability to gain bad ending by agreeing to kill Shido. And when they get the treasure and take it out into the real world it suddenly dematerializes when all of Tokyo is transported inside a giant palace (Mementos doesn't exist cause it's fake and gay). It's revealed Shido has this power cause of his ego and research or whatever. They then take a journey to the heart of the palace which is a dark tower like you'd see at the end of a dragon quest game or something. So then they get to the end and Shido absorbs the holy grail which was the result of all the research and become yaldabaoth but for the final phase of his fight he just becomes a big Shido. Oh yeah and I guess you fight Akechi before this due to a clash of reasoning or whatever but either way the traitor shit is dumb. Fuck making a perfectly good character a shallow idiot for no reason other than to be a plot device.
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